Travel, living, or working experiences in your own or other communities (500 words limit)
I have a draft. it is still rough. I don’t like the conclusion. I think it is abrupt. Maybe I want to briefly add a particular touching incident or perhaps a memorable request for a bouquet or a moment that especially touched my heart. But, I don’t know how to write it. Also, I am not sure if the essay is well developed to lead to a conclusion.
It definitely needs development, especially one or two paragraphs before the conclusion paragraph.
The essay has 500 words limit. I have around 400 words in the draft.
Thank you for your help.