i need some edit on my essay

i have recived some comment from my professor about my essay and i need an edit on it and here the comment.
1. be a title more explantory of ideas to the inknown reader.
2. four soumary didnt tell me much about the summary of book or movie seems like you went straight into comparing it to agriculture.
3. some choppy sentence.
4. there is some summarization in your evaluation and i dont want any summary outside of your summary section.
5. conclusion should summarize all the paper.
6. the summary most be related to the evalution.
7. more explaining about what happen.
you will find my essay in the attachment file.

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